What would you say if I told you my most valued possession is a baseball glove? It came to my hands the day that Brad died. I only remember sleeping in the garage the night he died. After breaking all the windows with my right fist. I could feel Bradley with me that night and in the morning; I took possession of his baseball glove then.
Bradley was a left-handed kid with the most warm smile you'll ever see. He had red bright hair that appeared to stand out as much as the sun. He was a brilliant kid and the nicest one. His worn out, brown fielder's glove is one of the things that capture his original personality. He had taken the time to write all over it. Poems and writings between the fingers, inside the pockets, behind, in the front, under the thumb... All in green ink. I believe this is why he did everything so good, he made every situation his own, it was unique.
Every time I found myself examining the glove, I could almost picture the skinny boy with his light-up hair out in the field reading his favorite lines in the short gaps of time between batters. I always enjoyed the most the memory of him smiling to the lines he had written; his smile is something I really miss.
Even when the memories of him start to blur and his smile becomes a little hazy in my head, I know the glove will bring him back to me. His pure and innocent essence is embodied in the old glove, afterall. His thoughts, his favorite poems, his personality.
It was really good! It would be awesome if it was a little bit longer, add a little bit more lib. Still super good though
ReplyDeleteI loved how you kept it short, to the point yet made it your own. As I read it, I could picture you, talking, telling me about this glove. Your vocabulary and descriptions are amazing! I love your beggining... :)
ReplyDeleteGreat story angelica!! although i think it would be even better if you included how he got the glove, and maybe if you could put some examples of how brad was such a special kid to holden ! <3 (:
ReplyDeletevery well written. i liked the way that u used factual information with fake, yet realistic information. i also think that u could have described a little more about brad.
ReplyDeleteI love how you started with the general idea of the composition and then later went on to add details :) incredible writer = Angelica Franco
ReplyDeleteI love how you started with the general idea of the composition and then later went on to add details :) incredible writer = Angelica Franco
ReplyDeleteangel, i loved your story. i would have loved if you would have put how you got your hands on the glove. i really like how you said that still see him in your head
ReplyDeletei truly enjoyed your story